Part I:

“Overconsumption of calories in the United States is usually meat and animal bi-products, which contain cholesterol and saturated fatty acids. The rate that the United States consumes meat is extremely excessive, given meat is not crucial to having a balanced diet.”

Not only did I not have hard evidence to prove my statement, but I also use the word “usually” which is not persuasive or successful in proving my argument.  The common logical fallacy that I used was False Cause.  I implied that obesity was caused largely by the consumption of meat and animal byproducts.  I need to use statistics to strengthen my argument and correctly relate the consumption of meat for a percentage of overconsumption of daily caloric intake.

“This would increase yields allowing farmers to sustain a food supply as well as grow their incomes.”

This was in relation to improving agricultural conditions in Sub-Saharan Africa.  This conclusion does not logically follow because there are so many more variables that have not been accounted for, such as governments manipulating the incomes of farmers.  I need to go in depth about how incomes will fall from an economic aspect.  I need to specify how incomes could potentially grow without government intervention.

Part II:

On the two wings, I am going to present my two conflicting arguments about the impact of the industrialization of meat on rural farmers in developing countries; one promoting and the other condemning.  In the middle I will draw my own conclusion together based off of the two different arguments.  I will draw diagrams and market graphs to illustrate the impacts in the short and long term.