Part  I

A Non Sequitur fallacy in my paper appears on page 6:

“According to Hans Geser in his article Understanding Mobile Technology from a Sociological Perspective in the book Thumb Culture, ‘the cell phone is prone to increase the pervasiveness of the most intimate personal relationships in individual life… it offers an easy escape route from unfamiliar public encounters’ (Thumb Culture 31). As a result, society has become more and more individualized.”

This can be fixed by going explaining Geser’s quote and going more in depth into it. Additionally,  clarification of the claim that society has become more individualized might also help.

A Hasty Generalization fallacy can be found in the same paragraph:

“Uncertainty and unfamiliarity are high in public places; the mobile phone only adds to this. Instead of facing that fear and overcoming it, people shrink away into their phones. What’s easier: talking to a stranger or texting your best friend? Society would say the latter, but is society always right?”

This can be corrected by doing more research about cell phone usage in public, as well as changing the language and meaning of the sentence “Instead of facing…”

Part II

For my poster presentation, I will probably need to find more graphs and charts to really bring out what my paper is talking about. I will most likely put these in the center of my poster, and have a paragraph explaining the graph.  In addition, a picture or two of people on their phones in public wouldn’t hurt. This could go on one of the panels of my poster. Lastly, I might put my the concluding paragraph of my paper (which describes what action should be taken with regard to proper cell phone etiquette) on the other side panel.